I am Zain
I am a realist
I wonder where my path will take me; what obstacles and challenges I will face
I hear calls and cries from within that guide my confused body
I see limitless potential and strength that is locked away
I want to unleash this potential and bring joy and happiness to this world
I am a realist
I pretend to be unfazed by the multiple challenges prevalent in my life
I feel overwhelmed by the pressures of expectation and the outside world
I touch the warm wall that separates and protects me from society
I worry for the future in order to not repeat the past
I cry for my family for all the hardships they faced for me
I am a realist
I understand my weaknesses; furthermore, look to making them my strengths
I say words to people that later I endlessly regret
I dream of a time where poverty has ended and everyone is treated equally
I try to improve myself in order to reach absolute perfection
I hope to make an impact on many people’s lives’
I am a realist
I am Zain
My blog’s title, Professional Procrastinator, was chosen mainly because of my frequency of procrastinating to the point where I believe it has become something incorporated into all aspects of my life. Also, my ability to procrastinate shows some of my strongest traits: my ability to work or do things under pressure, my mental stability under pressure, and my strong work ethic. I tend to be able to do better when stressed which is why procrastinating is such a large aspect of my life. Procrastinating is not just for school. Procrastinating can be used in everything in my life whether it be in preparing for things or my punctuality in general. Also, since my blog URL is persistent procrastinator I would say that since it is persistently or constantly done I have become a professional at it.
The quote for my blog by Walter Payton, “If you forget your roots, you have lost sight of everything”, shows that family and my heritage is very important to me. My parents are from Pakistan, but I am the first child in my family that was born outside of Pakistan however, I still feel a deep connection to Pakistan through my parents. Also, heritage and background are very important to me because I believe they are the foundation for my values, beliefs, and culture. Without my roots or the people that have taught or raised me to shape me to become the person I am today, I would be nothing.
Some styles of writing that I want to further explore through blogging are poetry and playwriting. Furthermore, I already have ideas as to what themes to write about including death, love, identity, and regret. Although I have specific goals for blogging, I want to be able to improve my writing skills overall since improvement is always possible and if you have not yet noticed yet I seek perfection in every way I can. Some of the main goals that I want to improve for writing are mechanics and voice since I have struggled in these aspects most. Personally, I have struggled in writing for quite long because I never read, but now I have worked to create a habit of reading and now need to write more in order to learn and grow as a writer.
Citations:
http://wittywinks.com/procrastination-a-step-by-step-guide-to-stop-procrastinating/
Dear Zain,
I really loved your “I am” poem. I really liked your choice of ideas, thoughts and expressions that you have worked with in your poem. You have nicely touched on world issues, while also talking about your individual identity at the same time. Furthermore, I have found many of your good qualities through this poem.
The only suggestion that I would offer is to increase a bit more imagination. I know it could be hard especially dealing with poems, but even a few words could have a powerful impact on the imagery displayed in your poem.
I really enjoyed reading your poem and getting to know you even more. I am looking forward to your next piece.
Thanks,
Muhammed
Dear Muhammad,
Thanks for taking the time to read my about me and giving me great feedback. I appreciate how you noticed the specific ideas used because they were all intended to show the key traits of myself. Your criticism of my work is completely agreeable, and now that I look at it, I see that it does lack imagination. I will definitely try to implement this into my writing.
Thanks,
Zain
Dear Zain,
Firstly, I want you to know how relatable this ‘about me’ piece was. It was incredible! Your work really portrays a part of you that I didn’t really know about but I guess that’s the whole point. Anyway, I really enjoyed this piece I think your connections were very comprehensive and thought out. I like how you chose to write a poem even though you lack confidence with them, beacuse that’s a bold thing to do and for a person who does not seem to like poems very much I think you did super! The flow of this piece was great and I liked how real you were. My favourite line of this poem would have to be,” I understand my weaknesses; furthermore, look to making them my strengths.” This statement really spoke to me, as I too sometimes struggle to face my weaknesses and therefore am unable to reach the destined goal.
An area where you could potentially improve your writing is probably taking the time to reread it over and make sure it is free of grammatical errors. I found some sentences where you could have maybe looked back on. “I want to be able to improve my writing skills overall since improvement is always possible and if you have not yet noticed yet I seek perfection in every way I can.” There is a “yet” twice in there and I also found a few extra commas here and there. I mean this is really just the nitty grityy stuff but it can really take away the overall voice that one is trying to make when their writing contains errors like these, which can be easily fixed. Other that that I couldn’t really find anything wrong with your actual poem. Maybe as Muhammed mentioned above, adding some useful and enticing imagery would defintely enchnace your work and captivate the reader. Also you could add more vocabulary to really make you witing pop and leave the reader in awe.
Regardless, it was a pleasure to read, and I look forward to your future writing and seeing how your blog grows.
Sincerely,
Arzoo
Dear Arzoo,
First of all, thanks for reading my blog and giving such thorough feedback. I’m glad that you enjoyed my writing and found it very relatable. With your feedback, my writing is becoming better, so I hope that you will continue to comment and help make my writing better.
Sincerely,
Zain
Dear Zain,
You wrote a splendid piece about your experiences and how you feel in life. I was able to fully experience what you were talking about, and I could tell that you were confident in writing your thoughts of your strengths and weaknesses in your “About Me”. The explanation of your url and blog name allowed me to better understand why you chose the names, which allowed me to understand your piece better.
The only improvement needed is to increase the use of more literary devices (eg. metaphor) to reinforce and bring more of a connection to what you wrote, I believe it would draw the reader in so much more.
Overall, I enjoyed reading your piece. It allowed me to better understand who you are, and I hope to read more of your future posts.
Sincerely,
Mariam.
Dear Mariam,
I appreciate that you took the time to read my about me and give me great comments. I never thought of adding more literary devices, but now that I think about it, it would be a great idea that could enhance my writing – so thank you for that criticism. I hope you continue to comment on my post because that can make my writing that much better.
Sincerely,
Zain
Zain,
I really liked your about me, as you allowed the reader to get to know you & see into who you really were! Your voice was really evident and your syntax & diction was amazing- the way you structured each sentence was amazing! I loved the line, “I pretend to be unfazed by the multiple challenges prevalent in my life”, since it was really honest & again had really beautiful syntax!
To improve all I can really say is watch your punctuation in your last paragraph & watch for run on sentences! Only a minor adjustment & something I’m guilty of too!
Again, I really loved this piece & can’t wait to read even more pieces! Love your blog theme as well, can’t wait to see it filled with more posts!
Sincerely,
Alyna
Dear Alyna,
Thanks for the great comments – it means a lot coming from a great writer. Furthermore, I’m glad that you liked my piece. All in all, I completely agree with your criticism because the run on sentences is something I struggle with. Please continue to share your thoughts because they will help me to grow as a writer.
Sincerely,
Zain
Dear Zain,
That was……goooood. Even though you procrastinate, you wrote about it like it is a good trait to have which shocked and impressed me. To improve I would say having the I am paragraph and paragraph about you was a bit strange and confused me for a little bit. Otherwise nice. After reading this I look forward to getting to know you.
Sincerely,
Arham
Dear Arham,
Thank you, Arham, I pride myself in my procrastination so it’s good that you noticed. I appreciate you taking the time to read my writing and also giving me good feedback. I will use this feedback to improve my writing
Sincerely,
Zain